tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-72091212420484453.post8395109539369375839..comments2023-04-18T02:13:25.147-07:00Comments on Authors Refuge: Fic: First PersonAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10035740929329660756noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-72091212420484453.post-45839522523863417132012-08-06T20:50:18.206-07:002012-08-06T20:50:18.206-07:00Thanks! I really like playing with imagery. The ch...Thanks! I really like playing with imagery. The choppy transition to the final paragraph was choppier than intended, as pacing is something I'm still working on.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10035740929329660756noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-72091212420484453.post-51253826121971922632012-08-06T15:15:00.325-07:002012-08-06T15:15:00.325-07:00You write some nice fiction images, mystery, etc. ...You write some nice fiction images, mystery, etc. Like the surpise shifting out of the story into another one at the last couple of grafs. A little disjointed a few places; not sure if intended or not? Part of the intended reader experience?Unknownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12733491423501174974noreply@blogger.com